Essay 3 Final Draft
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cuINdTmj4BTmkElXtY7-NAqj3Oh2xB7r2dRnjx_tEmg/edit My final draft of our third essay of the semester titled “The Global Citizen”
My First Draft – Global Citizen w/ Peer Comments
This is my first essay draft of the Global Citizen with comments from my peers from the global workshop https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aaUTyu2sSwsEANyZekmIcgaQ8pFpE-tRagdkpLOFIxM/edit
Revision Plan – Global Citizen
After reading the comments I received from the peer review global workshop, I have some major restructuring and revisions for my essay. These corrections will really improve my essay. The first global revision I am going to make is adding more evidence from authors in my paragraphs because I found that I did not include enough that was sufficient. In one of my paragraphs, I only had evidence from Duhigg and Barboza, and I found that my paragraph was mainly…
Essay 2 – Technology
Essay 2: For the second essay of the semester, I wrote about the negative effects of technology and how they are impacting the way we interact and function as human beings. First Draft – https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gjQmXgTLs6vxfCvOiAEfrlawf06fBRSiiXvPLIQ0oDs/edit Final Draft – https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rh7XcrF7kGucx-_5ALpUpBAUPNlfJLTfLjqfR-Hjgcg/edit
Global Revision Improvements
The first global revision I made was in my paragraph discussing the mental health effects of technology use. I had a lot of evidence from authors and I found it was a little dense with information and evidence, so I decided to add more personal experience to the paragraph and how I could relate to what the authors were saying. I specifically talked about my social media use and how I often compare myself to others on social media, which…
First Draft of Essay 2
First Draft of Essay 2: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gjQmXgTLs6vxfCvOiAEfrlawf06fBRSiiXvPLIQ0oDs/edit Revision Plan: The comments my peers left me on my essay really help me revise and improve my writing globally. I think one of the main improvements I will strive to make in my essay is adding more personal connections into some of my paragraphs. One of the comments my peers left me was that I had a lot of evidence from authors, but not so much of my own personal experience. Especially in…
Happiness Essay
Happiness is a concept that is individualistic to each person. Everyone wants to be happy, and they deserve to be happy. Happiness is brought to me by good relationships and surrounding myself with happy people. Good relationships constitute for a good life. First Draft: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iIMo3rpp70JFNavtzd6YIgE4gENrKeh6LTW-QyQs3Bs/edit Final Draft: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1aDY4R2ZpDtzswMgV6cn1hv-Y6UWE5IG0ViyLaRjfGLU/edit
